Give me some feedback on the poem I just wrote…?

Posted on March, 27 at 12:01 pm |

Polished old shoes fall short of newness,
Embellished words repeating ignorantly
God is dead
God is dead,

Skeptical remarks coming from top dogs,
Doubting the law of gravity,
Drinking water from broken cisterns,
Wine from empty bottles,
Rusty fishing knifes stabbing
The ongoing stand of Nature,
Exploding in spring colors,

I step outside, smell the mint bushes,
Sky stained orange,
The mark of intelligence,
Shining trough the shed.

But they repeat ignorantly,
God is dead.

He is alive.
The ending need 2 be stronger. recycled glass . fix foundation . Any ideas?
I changed it 2

"But they reluctantly repeat those words
God is dead,
God is dead. Kentucky foundation repair company . "


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